Article revision-
I have written a 3-page article, but my instructor mentioned that the writing is too rough. Hence, I need someone to help me revise it.
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Have you sufficiently shown me that you can use fundamental principles or concepts of Mechanical engineering? I’m not sure. You described some concepts but I don’t see the work. What’s also missing is the relevance of these. How have these courses prepared you for your career? How might you use these on the job?
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